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Random Poetry - Silence - 07-08-2016 I need some constructive criticism on one of my newer poems. It's a bit forced at times but I haven't written in a few months, so I'm a bit rusty. Spoiler:Neverland by Silence Slumbering souls encased in wood, laying dormant the boy said he could. But forgotten in dreams and lullabies, during the night sky he continuously flies. Left in Neverland to live his dreams he is finally able meet his lost boy team. Hidden pasts and dark desires, this enigmatic boy is a flickering fire. One side dark the other light, against Captain Hook in eternal fights. Flying with Wendy and his crew of boys he shows them the world past man's ploys. Fingertips on the moonlit waters, the sound of silence never once falters. In his dreams the young boy soars however his reality is something more. Forever forcing a forlorn smile, his lonesome spirit wanders for miles. Grasping at hope and fallen stars Peter Pan wasn't faster than the cars. Lives are short but love is lasting so make your mark and leave your light casting. Peter Pan was oh so young, but even now we can tell when the bell tower has rung. RE: Random Poetry - Kissu - 07-08-2016 I think it's pretty good :3 more ^,^ RE: Random Poetry - Zephyrus - 07-08-2016 This is pretty good actually, it has a nice tone to it
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