[PInkleton]

Here is the start of this game, I've been at it surprisingly for over an hour and only got this far. I plan on making it much bigger, but for now I am off. I would like to see HC opinion of it as I go along coding it.
http://www.mediafire.com/view/?t4bmj7v81rq44rn
Code as of now: (note the transfer of code from notepad has made it spaced, run the .bat file I post above, not the copy and paste code.

Code:

@echo off title The Warrior's Adventure color 0A echo Welcome to The Warrior's Adventure -Pinkleton- echo This is my second command game, I hope you enjoy! echo. echo Choose what you want to do here: echo. echo 1.) Start Game echo 2.) Exit Game echo. set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu1 if %var%==2 goto exit pause :menu1 cls echo You have started the game! pause echo You have just finished the last day of basic training. Congratulations are in order, you are now a warrior! To celebrate your achievement we can have some fun, you decide. echo 1.) Go to the local tavern and drink echo 2.) Go to the arena and watch the fights echo 3.) Refuse to go out and write a letter to your family back in your hometown set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu2 if %var%==2 goto menu3 if %var%==3 goto menu4 pause :menu2 echo. echo The night starts off just like any night in the tavern, except this time you have reason to be proud. You go to the front of the bar and order a round of the finest mead for all your friends. The night continues with raging stories and brutal drinking, until half morning a drunken man come up to and starts picking a fight. Being a warrior now, what do you want to do? echo. echo 1.) Fight the man echo 2.) Ignore the man set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu5 if %var%==2 goto menu6 pause :menu5 echo. echo Being the warrior you are, you know that this fight won't last long. You hope out of your seat and throw your glass of mead in his face, the man now furious charger at you. Using your advanced agility you quickly move out of the way and throw a deadly kick into the back of his knee, after the man is on the ground you deliver a devastating chop to his neck. The fight end and you go home. echo. echo 1.) Wake up set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu7 pause :menu6 echo. echo You ignore the man and rush out of the bar, feeling proud of yourself for being the bigger man. The night ends at this point and you go home and sleep echo. echo 1.) Wake Up set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu7 pause :menu3 echo. echo You arrive at the arenas right as the next fight it starting. While you are not the type to gamble, given the special day, you make an exception and place a bet. echo. echo 1.) Bet 40Jenny on the Blue Team echo 2.) Bet 40Jenny on the Red Team set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu8 if %var%==2 goto menu9 pause :menu8 echo. echo You placed 40Jenny on the blue team and the red teams warrior overpowered the blue team in an instant. You lose 40Jenny and go home with no dinner. echo. echo 1.) Wake up hungry set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu7 pause :menu9 echo. echo You placed 40Jenny on the red team, the teams warrior comes out looking confident. The fight ends quickly with 0.9 on the blue team and 3.1 on the red team. The red team won, and you came back with triple your Jenny. You have a wonderful meal and a flask of mead before going to bed. echo. echo 1.) Wake up set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu7 pause :menu4 echo. echo You decide to end the night without going out, so you come home and write to your family back home. A lot has happened to you. Some of it was good, some of it was bad, and most of it was just average. echo. echo 1.) Write a letter about the good things echo 2.) Write a letter about the bad things set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu10 if %var%==2 goto menu11 pause :menu10 echo. echo You write a letter about the great things that have happened to you! You tell your family how you miss them and will always love them. When your family receives the letter they send you 15Jenny, which is more than they could ever afford, just so you can have a night out. You think to yourself what great parents. echo. echo 1.) Go to bed and wake up the next morning set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu7 pause :menu11 echo. echo You decide to write about the bad things that happened to you. Your parents get the letter and feel horrible for encouraging you sign up. The sell all there land, trade in the tools, and send you 2,000Jenny. However after doing this your parents take there own lives out of guilt, but you don't find this out till you go home 15 years later. echo. echo 1.) Go to bed and wake up the next morning set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu7 pause :menu7 cls echo You wake up in the morning feeling as though your rest was cut short an hour or two. You slowly get washed up and then change into your new warriors armor. You reflect on what you did last night and think to yourself if you made the right choice. You shrug it off and leave the house. You then encounter your new manager, Barnabas Pinkleton. echo. echo 1.) Show respect and take a kneel before Mr Pinkleton echo 2.) Forget respect and ask directly what your assignment is set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu12 if %var%==2 goto menu13 pause :menu12 echo. echo Why what a respectful young lad we have here today. For your first day I will start you off with something easy, boars. I want you to go into the woods behind town and bring me the meat of one boar. echo. echo 1.) Accept Quest and Proceed to the woods set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu14 pause :menu13 echo. echo What a rude little brat! For your first I will must start you off with something easy, boars, although with manners like yours you will probably die right off. Go into the woods and bring the meat of one boar echo. echo 1.) Accept Quest and Proceed to the woods set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu14 pause :menu14 cls echo You arrive in the woods after accepting the quest. You have two choices, sit and wait for a boar to pass through, or go deep into the woods to find one yourself. echo. echo 1.) Wait for the boar (estimated time 3 hours) echo 2.) Find the boar yourself (estimated time 30 minutes) set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu15 if %var%==2 goto menu15 pause :menu15 cls echo You come across a wild boar finally, after all the time you spent on this boar, and now you can kill it. There are many ways to kill a board, but being the warrior you are you charge at it. You unsheathe your sword and jump towards a tree, kicking the tree and launching yourself at an angle towards the boar. In mid flight you swing your sword and take the beasts head. echo. echo 1.) Return to Mr Pinkleton set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu16 pause :menu16 cls echo You have done good bringing me the meat of a boar, I now promote you to level 2! Now don't get cocky yet, you still have a long way to go before reaching the top. Are you ready for the next quest? Oh who am I kidding, it's not like you have a choice anymore... Oh wait you didn't know? After you complete your beginners quest you are now the property of your manager. Now go stand post outside the inn, it's your turn for guard duty! echo. echo 1.) While surprised set out to guard duty. echo 2.) Kill yourself and be free from being his property set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu17 if %var%==2 goto menu18 pause :menu17 cls echo You set out for your first time on guard duty, which will probably be just another boring day. It starts early in the morning and you have to wear such heavy armor. You spend the day with the other guards, which is basically finding any excuse to enjoy yourself. However today ends with you barely keeping your eyes open. You go home echo. echo 1.) Sleep, you've earned it. set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu19 pause :menu18 cls echo You try to kill yourself but fail because the doctor revives you, now you are sold into sex slavery where you shall be raped by men everyday until death! Rethink you actions. echo 1.) GAME OVER! Restart set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu1 pause :menu19 cls echo You awake in the morning and get ready for another day of guard duty. echo. echo 1.) Go to guard duty echo 2.) Skip guard duty set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu20 if %var%==2 goto menu21 pause :menu21 cls echo You skipped guard duty and were branded a traitor. Pinkleton sends men out to kill you. echo. echo 1.) GAME OVER! Restart set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu1 pause :menu20 echo. echo You leave the house and take the long walk to your post. You feel bored already, but slightly excited. Almost as if you could feel something would happen today, and how right you were. It seems that board you killed earlier had a mother, a mother who weighs 960lb and is out for blood. You have no choice but to fight it echo. echo 1.) Fight set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu22 pause :menu22 cls echo You start the epic fight the boar. First you order the other guards to circle the boar and attack the legs. After the men have damage the boars legs you run up to the boar and unsheathe two of your daggers, you then plunge the dagger into it's leg and start climbing up. It is shaking and thrusting violently at you and now are scared. Overcoming your fear you continue to climb and reach the boars back, you firm yourself onto it and unsheathe your long sword. You start hacking away, and after hundreds of swings the beast drops dead. You are regarded as a hero and promoted to rank 5! echo. echo 1.)Pass out and wake up in the hospital set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu23 pause :menu23 cls echo You wake up in the hosptial, wondering what happened last night. Your head aches and you cringe every time you attempt to remember you feel groggy. pause echo That groggy feeling slowly fades away as you realize, I just killed a bloody boar the size of my home! echo Your body feels at though every single step is putting pressure onto your bones, you feel as though the adrenaline rush from fighting used even your bone marrow to help with this fight. You go back to sleep, not awaking for another week. pause echo The time has officially past, and now you are feel perky and hot, almost as if you were a whore at the brothel after a good tip. You realize, your level 5. That is only 5 ranks under Pinkleton, soon you won't be a slave, but a slave owner. You go to message board posted infront of where the inn once was, you take a look and see a bounty for you to acquire. echo 1.) Take the bounty set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu24 pause :menu24 cls echo Good job on accepting the bounty, you are going after an infamous man known as Boris the Flesh, who is said to have fingers so strong it can rip metal from a blade, flesh from your body, and crush rocks as though they were butter. You gulp and set off. pause echo. echo This is my next break HC. Come back to the thread later for more. pause :exit

I know there are spelling errors and text placements issues, this will be fixed at a later time.

[PInkleton]

Here is the start of this game, I've been at it surprisingly for over an hour and only got this far. I plan on making it much bigger, but for now I am off. I would like to see HC opinion of it as I go along coding it.
http://www.mediafire.com/view/?t4bmj7v81rq44rn
Code as of now: (note the transfer of code from notepad has made it spaced, run the .bat file I post above, not the copy and paste code.

Code:

@echo off title The Warrior's Adventure color 0A echo Welcome to The Warrior's Adventure -Pinkleton- echo This is my second command game, I hope you enjoy! echo. echo Choose what you want to do here: echo. echo 1.) Start Game echo 2.) Exit Game echo. set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu1 if %var%==2 goto exit pause :menu1 cls echo You have started the game! pause echo You have just finished the last day of basic training. Congratulations are in order, you are now a warrior! To celebrate your achievement we can have some fun, you decide. echo 1.) Go to the local tavern and drink echo 2.) Go to the arena and watch the fights echo 3.) Refuse to go out and write a letter to your family back in your hometown set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu2 if %var%==2 goto menu3 if %var%==3 goto menu4 pause :menu2 echo. echo The night starts off just like any night in the tavern, except this time you have reason to be proud. You go to the front of the bar and order a round of the finest mead for all your friends. The night continues with raging stories and brutal drinking, until half morning a drunken man come up to and starts picking a fight. Being a warrior now, what do you want to do? echo. echo 1.) Fight the man echo 2.) Ignore the man set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu5 if %var%==2 goto menu6 pause :menu5 echo. echo Being the warrior you are, you know that this fight won't last long. You hope out of your seat and throw your glass of mead in his face, the man now furious charger at you. Using your advanced agility you quickly move out of the way and throw a deadly kick into the back of his knee, after the man is on the ground you deliver a devastating chop to his neck. The fight end and you go home. echo. echo 1.) Wake up set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu7 pause :menu6 echo. echo You ignore the man and rush out of the bar, feeling proud of yourself for being the bigger man. The night ends at this point and you go home and sleep echo. echo 1.) Wake Up set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu7 pause :menu3 echo. echo You arrive at the arenas right as the next fight it starting. While you are not the type to gamble, given the special day, you make an exception and place a bet. echo. echo 1.) Bet 40Jenny on the Blue Team echo 2.) Bet 40Jenny on the Red Team set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu8 if %var%==2 goto menu9 pause :menu8 echo. echo You placed 40Jenny on the blue team and the red teams warrior overpowered the blue team in an instant. You lose 40Jenny and go home with no dinner. echo. echo 1.) Wake up hungry set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu7 pause :menu9 echo. echo You placed 40Jenny on the red team, the teams warrior comes out looking confident. The fight ends quickly with 0.9 on the blue team and 3.1 on the red team. The red team won, and you came back with triple your Jenny. You have a wonderful meal and a flask of mead before going to bed. echo. echo 1.) Wake up set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu7 pause :menu4 echo. echo You decide to end the night without going out, so you come home and write to your family back home. A lot has happened to you. Some of it was good, some of it was bad, and most of it was just average. echo. echo 1.) Write a letter about the good things echo 2.) Write a letter about the bad things set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu10 if %var%==2 goto menu11 pause :menu10 echo. echo You write a letter about the great things that have happened to you! You tell your family how you miss them and will always love them. When your family receives the letter they send you 15Jenny, which is more than they could ever afford, just so you can have a night out. You think to yourself what great parents. echo. echo 1.) Go to bed and wake up the next morning set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu7 pause :menu11 echo. echo You decide to write about the bad things that happened to you. Your parents get the letter and feel horrible for encouraging you sign up. The sell all there land, trade in the tools, and send you 2,000Jenny. However after doing this your parents take there own lives out of guilt, but you don't find this out till you go home 15 years later. echo. echo 1.) Go to bed and wake up the next morning set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu7 pause :menu7 cls echo You wake up in the morning feeling as though your rest was cut short an hour or two. You slowly get washed up and then change into your new warriors armor. You reflect on what you did last night and think to yourself if you made the right choice. You shrug it off and leave the house. You then encounter your new manager, Barnabas Pinkleton. echo. echo 1.) Show respect and take a kneel before Mr Pinkleton echo 2.) Forget respect and ask directly what your assignment is set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu12 if %var%==2 goto menu13 pause :menu12 echo. echo Why what a respectful young lad we have here today. For your first day I will start you off with something easy, boars. I want you to go into the woods behind town and bring me the meat of one boar. echo. echo 1.) Accept Quest and Proceed to the woods set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu14 pause :menu13 echo. echo What a rude little brat! For your first I will must start you off with something easy, boars, although with manners like yours you will probably die right off. Go into the woods and bring the meat of one boar echo. echo 1.) Accept Quest and Proceed to the woods set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu14 pause :menu14 cls echo You arrive in the woods after accepting the quest. You have two choices, sit and wait for a boar to pass through, or go deep into the woods to find one yourself. echo. echo 1.) Wait for the boar (estimated time 3 hours) echo 2.) Find the boar yourself (estimated time 30 minutes) set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu15 if %var%==2 goto menu15 pause :menu15 cls echo You come across a wild boar finally, after all the time you spent on this boar, and now you can kill it. There are many ways to kill a board, but being the warrior you are you charge at it. You unsheathe your sword and jump towards a tree, kicking the tree and launching yourself at an angle towards the boar. In mid flight you swing your sword and take the beasts head. echo. echo 1.) Return to Mr Pinkleton set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu16 pause :menu16 cls echo You have done good bringing me the meat of a boar, I now promote you to level 2! Now don't get cocky yet, you still have a long way to go before reaching the top. Are you ready for the next quest? Oh who am I kidding, it's not like you have a choice anymore... Oh wait you didn't know? After you complete your beginners quest you are now the property of your manager. Now go stand post outside the inn, it's your turn for guard duty! echo. echo 1.) While surprised set out to guard duty. echo 2.) Kill yourself and be free from being his property set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu17 if %var%==2 goto menu18 pause :menu17 cls echo You set out for your first time on guard duty, which will probably be just another boring day. It starts early in the morning and you have to wear such heavy armor. You spend the day with the other guards, which is basically finding any excuse to enjoy yourself. However today ends with you barely keeping your eyes open. You go home echo. echo 1.) Sleep, you've earned it. set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu19 pause :menu18 cls echo You try to kill yourself but fail because the doctor revives you, now you are sold into sex slavery where you shall be raped by men everyday until death! Rethink you actions. echo 1.) GAME OVER! Restart set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu1 pause :menu19 cls echo You awake in the morning and get ready for another day of guard duty. echo. echo 1.) Go to guard duty echo 2.) Skip guard duty set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu20 if %var%==2 goto menu21 pause :menu21 cls echo You skipped guard duty and were branded a traitor. Pinkleton sends men out to kill you. echo. echo 1.) GAME OVER! Restart set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu1 pause :menu20 echo. echo You leave the house and take the long walk to your post. You feel bored already, but slightly excited. Almost as if you could feel something would happen today, and how right you were. It seems that board you killed earlier had a mother, a mother who weighs 960lb and is out for blood. You have no choice but to fight it echo. echo 1.) Fight set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu22 pause :menu22 cls echo You start the epic fight the boar. First you order the other guards to circle the boar and attack the legs. After the men have damage the boars legs you run up to the boar and unsheathe two of your daggers, you then plunge the dagger into it's leg and start climbing up. It is shaking and thrusting violently at you and now are scared. Overcoming your fear you continue to climb and reach the boars back, you firm yourself onto it and unsheathe your long sword. You start hacking away, and after hundreds of swings the beast drops dead. You are regarded as a hero and promoted to rank 5! echo. echo 1.)Pass out and wake up in the hospital set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu23 pause :menu23 cls echo You wake up in the hosptial, wondering what happened last night. Your head aches and you cringe every time you attempt to remember you feel groggy. pause echo That groggy feeling slowly fades away as you realize, I just killed a bloody boar the size of my home! echo Your body feels at though every single step is putting pressure onto your bones, you feel as though the adrenaline rush from fighting used even your bone marrow to help with this fight. You go back to sleep, not awaking for another week. pause echo The time has officially past, and now you are feel perky and hot, almost as if you were a whore at the brothel after a good tip. You realize, your level 5. That is only 5 ranks under Pinkleton, soon you won't be a slave, but a slave owner. You go to message board posted infront of where the inn once was, you take a look and see a bounty for you to acquire. echo 1.) Take the bounty set /p var=Set Command: if %var%==1 goto menu24 pause :menu24 cls echo Good job on accepting the bounty, you are going after an infamous man known as Boris the Flesh, who is said to have fingers so strong it can rip metal from a blade, flesh from your body, and crush rocks as though they were butter. You gulp and set off. pause echo. echo This is my next break HC. Come back to the thread later for more. pause :exit

I know there are spelling errors and text placements issues, this will be fixed at a later time.

[Deque]

Why didn't you submit this game to the HC CLI Game Compilation? I mean it is much better. The Trolled.bat was actually pretty sloppy and boring.
I ran it and got some issues. I.e. right after starting the game it says it can't understand the instruction "warrior". I can play it, but I miss a lot from the story because of this.

[Deque]

Why didn't you submit this game to the HC CLI Game Compilation? I mean it is much better. The Trolled.bat was actually pretty sloppy and boring.
I ran it and got some issues. I.e. right after starting the game it says it can't understand the instruction "warrior". I can play it, but I miss a lot from the story because of this.

[PInkleton]

That text looks German, which it is not. And I only decided to start to doing this after that submission, After I do more work on it I could replace my sloppy trolleed that a threw together in 15minutes. The Opening page should look like this:

[PInkleton]

That text looks German, which it is not. And I only decided to start to doing this after that submission, After I do more work on it I could replace my sloppy trolleed that a threw together in 15minutes. The Opening page should look like this:

[Deque]

It looks German, because my operating system is German.
That's why I translated the error message for you. It says the instruction "warrior!" is unknown.
Everything in the sentence after the word warrior isn't shown on the screen, because of that issue

Edit: It is because you put these strings in a new line:

Code:

echo You have just finished the last day of basic training. Congratulations are in order, you are now a warrior! To celebrate your achievement we can have some fun, you decide.

You should write this instead:

Code:

echo You have just finished the last day of basic training. Congratulations are in order, you are now a warrior! To celebrate your achievement we can have some fun, you decide.

I mean you don't want people to correct the code before they can play your game.

[Deque]

It looks German, because my operating system is German.
That's why I translated the error message for you. It says the instruction "warrior!" is unknown.
Everything in the sentence after the word warrior isn't shown on the screen, because of that issue

Edit: It is because you put these strings in a new line:

Code:

echo You have just finished the last day of basic training. Congratulations are in order, you are now a warrior! To celebrate your achievement we can have some fun, you decide.

You should write this instead:

Code:

echo You have just finished the last day of basic training. Congratulations are in order, you are now a warrior! To celebrate your achievement we can have some fun, you decide.

I mean you don't want people to correct the code before they can play your game.

[PInkleton]

It looks German, because my operating system is German.
That's why I translated the error message for you. It says the instruction "warrior!" is unknown.
Everything in the sentence after the word warrior isn't shown on the screen, because of that issue.

Can you attempt to change your language to English for a short period and then try to run it. I have tested it 20times myself throughout coding it and it has never had an issue.

[PInkleton]

It looks German, because my operating system is German.
That's why I translated the error message for you. It says the instruction "warrior!" is unknown.
Everything in the sentence after the word warrior isn't shown on the screen, because of that issue.

Can you attempt to change your language to English for a short period and then try to run it. I have tested it 20times myself throughout coding it and it has never had an issue.